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14. Procrastination. If you had more time, you’d be able to put it off longer. What do you put off to the last moment? Why? Tell a story about how you just barely got something done in time – or didn’t.
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You Again

Nights Daybreak's picture
Submitted by Nights Daybreak on March 15, 2008 - 21:10.

I have you again.
And its strange,
Because its not like before.

For sometime,
There was a rift between us
And the going was not easy.

It was like a bridge,
Suspended over an endless
Creavice in the earth.

It seperated two meadows,
Each so beautiful
Yet so different.

We were stuck on that bridge
And I was hoping
It wouldn't fall.

And at times
I made mistakes
And so did you.

But now I feel
Like we've crossed the bridge
Together and at peace.

From relationship
To uneasy silence
To friendship.

I'm glad to have you again.
And the piece of me that
Unconsciously I left with you...

Has returned to me again.

miss_literal's picture

wow, nice. i like It

Submitted by miss_literal on March 15, 2008 - 21:27.

wow, nice. i like

It separated two meadows,
Each, so beautiful,
Yet so different.

my only suggestion is about commas. sometimes they seem to be in random places and break the flow of your lines. examples: eleventh line, after Each. Ninteenth line, after Feel. twentysecond line, after Relationship. otherwise, it's wonderful

Nights Daybreak's picture

thanks

Submitted by Nights Daybreak on March 16, 2008 - 09:38.

Thanks for the suggestion.

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