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14. Procrastination. If you had more time, you’d be able to put it off longer. What do you put off to the last moment? Why? Tell a story about how you just barely got something done in time – or didn’t.
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My Shadow

Submitted by T Nichols on March 27, 2008 - 09:16.

My Shadow

By Tim Nichols
Lyme School, Grade 7

My shadow follows me everywhere I go
I chase it and it runs along with me
It dances in a field on a sunny day
I try to pick it up but it won’t budge
It feels lonely, being only a two-dimensional figure
When I walk into the dark it disappears

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YES

Submitted by S.Finley on March 28, 2008 - 09:50.

Yayho tim its your b-day go tim.

great

Submitted by T Nichols on March 28, 2008 - 09:51.

awesome poem. its the best poem in the world

UVM Mentor Feedback

Submitted by nataliap on March 29, 2008 - 13:38.

Tim,

I really like what you've started with this poem! It's a great topic and i love the way you give your shadow a presence but explain its loneliness at the same time. The image of your shadow dancing and being chased are both great!

I think that you've only just begun to scratch the surface of what this poem could be. Keep going with it! How does your shadow make you feel? Do you feel like you have a friend or do you too feel lonely because it is just a two dimensional figure? What about when it is a dark or rainy day and you can't see your shadow, do you still feel its presence? Keep up the good work!

Thanks for sharing,
Natalia

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