Your thoughts on my thoughts
Your thoughts on my thoughts
By Ellie Laukaitis
Williston Central School, Grade 8
Have you had a time
when you imagine every conversation,
every last word,
and then
they never get said?
When something's planned to go one way,
but then it backfires
and the getaway car turns left
instead of right.
And that's when you realize windows are two-way.
and maybe every feeling
is two-way also...
so you look at it the other way
and imagine speaking about that
Like with the archery target...
and the sharks and minnows
and the fact that
you didn't drown
on your 200 breaststroke.
Did you even watch me?
I'm sorry, but I believe I'm at the point
where you can't remember where conversations end
and thoughts and emails
begin.
Did I ever tell you about that day?
Did you know
being spontaneous
is actually planning,
then forgetting
(or forgetting to forget
and actually remembering,
and then you're not spontaneous at all but you have to still make it look like you haven't been planning this conversation for the past week or so, which of course you haven't, so maybe really
the people who are good at being spontaneous
are actually just really good actors).
Did you read
everything I said? Everything I wrote?
Can you hear all the unsaid words
I hung in the air
with fishing line
last August?
Maybe I underestimated you,
my great rambling friend
Maybe, by some freak chance,
you understand
and you can read this
even though you'll never read this
and you feel the same way
and maybe you could hear the whole time
and now you're left standing there
wondering where
all those unsaid words
go.
KOEHBSBYay....
I think you wrote this about him but it works for so many other things too.... and there's just so much it could possibly mean. When I was reading it in the newspaper today it just seemed so forceful and meaningful. I really like all the analogies.... like the getaway car one (that was a great image and it fit the situation of backfiring perfectly and it's something that everybody can picture or know exactly what you're talking about) and the two way mirrors and the two way feelings. And I like how it seemed to keep going and stop and start.... it gave a lot of feeling to it.
-emotive
I read this in the newspaper
I read this in the newspaper this morning and was really impressed. (If you're looking for minor suggestions I can help). Very nice job.