YWP

Hi Gregory,
I thought this piece had such a cool idea behind it! Writing about the Young Writer's Project FOR the Young Writer's Project is really funny, but is also pretty sophisticated. Writing directly about what or who you're writing for is something we talk a lot about in college English classes, so you're already on your way! I think it's great.
One thing that I would suggest to you is to try to keep the rhythm of your poem more consistent throughout. When some lines are longer and some lines have only one word, it becomes difficult to read them at the same pace. When the rhythm varies throughout a poem, it's harder read it as one whole piece rather than the individual stanzas in which the pace is constant. I also think that it would be funnier if the rhythm was consistent. It would be easier to read out loud and to read every verse the same way, and that would add to the unity of the poem as well. If you wanted, you could try rewriting so that each line (or each pair of lines, like the first and third/ second and fourth) had approximately the same number of syllables in each stanza. I think if you did that, you'd find that the poem would flow a lot better. Of course, that's not necessarily something that's easy to think about when you're writing a poem. When you freewrite, you should just write! And you shouldn't have to think about the number of syllables you're putting down in each line. Still, I think it would be interesting to see what a consistent rhythm would do for your poem. Try it out and see what you think!
Best,
Tressie
UVM Mentor