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I Couldn't Live Without Him

rbbrdck_137's picture

I almost remember his soft sweet voice.
The way he cradled me and told me that he loved me.
We were the young love,
That no one believed in.
He was my air,
I couldn't live without him.
He rapped his arms around me,
That warm, soft blanket of care.
He sang to me and comforted me,
On the grayest of all days.
I pushed his honey blonde hair
Out of his endless deep brown eyes and rested my head on his chest.
He was my shield,
My protection from the outside world.
But now my hair all ruffled and frumpy,
I sit in the police station in his large gray sweat shirt.
Tears pool at my eyes and tumble down,
Miles and miles down.
When I close my eyes I see you,
But when I open them...
You're gone.

leabee's picture

I love how strong of a

I love how strong of a writer you are. This says so much. I'm not sure if it is true, but if so then I'm sorry. I don't know how you feel so I'm not going to say I do. But truely I am sorry. But I felt that love in the beginning, and just as I read the end I felt the pain. I saw it. Its sad, but the way you wrote it showed its beauty. Theres always something beautiful hidden under something ugly, you just have to find it.

rbbrdck_137's picture

Thanks!

Thanks for the great comments Leabee, I really appriciate them. I got a little nervous when no one commented, I thought that it was bad:(. The poem is not true and I also feel that I can connect with the charactor. Do you (you being anyine) think I should continue something with this piece? Send me back a reply. Maybe next time I should write at end NOT TRUE!!!! (lol)!
Rbbrdck_137

Geist's picture

It definitely is something

It definitely is something you can expand upon.

Fleshing this out into an entire storyline could make quite the narrative.

rbbrdck_137's picture

But... do you like

But...

do you like it?
Rbbrdck_137

Geist's picture

Yes. It was implied that I

Yes.

It was implied that I like it.

As a single piece, it's quite excellent.

As an introduction to a story, it would be just the hook you need, and I'm sure you could make the rest of it just as good.

rbbrdck_137's picture

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