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14. Procrastination. If you had more time, you’d be able to put it off longer. What do you put off to the last moment? Why? Tell a story about how you just barely got something done in time – or didn’t.
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HELP

Professor_Zoom's picture
Submitted by Professor_Zoom on April 10, 2008 - 19:39.

The ink
spreading slowly over his palm

H E L P

Why stop there?
he asks himself
Soon it's everywhere
His entire hand
consumed by the word
Thanks to a Bic
and Sharpie.

It's because he wants help
for something that can't be helped

but he always dreams.

pineapple_babbit's picture

Wow... This poem is really

Submitted by pineapple_babbit on April 10, 2008 - 19:47.

Wow... This poem is really good zoom...
That and it goes along with your icon right now... Wow... Are y'all ok?
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"you know, if it made sense, I probibly wouldn't have done it...." -Self quoted

offreadin's picture

re: help (There needs to be a help line for creative subject lin

Submitted by offreadin on April 10, 2008 - 19:49.

Deep... I was thinking, could you use more vivid languange to describe the word "help" taking over his hand. It's good with the simplicity, so that's my only suggestion. I like how the end line is set off. And I think thepicture helps to visualize it. The next question will be can you make the poem stand by itself with out the picture?

bluedisch.'s picture

very powerful. i hope you

Submitted by bluedisch. on April 10, 2008 - 19:49.

very powerful. i hope you are alright. =X
i like this poem, especially
the last line.
well done.

Usagi's picture

Dreams.

Submitted by Usagi on April 10, 2008 - 19:53.

Dreams.
Yes.
Your poetry has such an impact when the reader considers what you've written before.

Very cool picture.

Professor_Zoom's picture

i had to reapply it at least

Submitted by Professor_Zoom on April 10, 2008 - 19:58.

i had to reapply it at least twice today.

(taken out of context, one might think I was talking about "makeup")

leabee's picture

You leave me wondering why

Submitted by leabee on April 10, 2008 - 20:21.

You leave me wondering why your asking for help. Its powerful. But makes people wonder if your really in danger. Hmm. I like it though. :)

apples's picture

Wow Zoom, this is seriously

Submitted by apples on April 11, 2008 - 12:07.

Wow Zoom, this is seriously powerful. I really like it, especially the last line.
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Humans are merely puppets of civilization. ~Self Quoted

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