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14. Procrastination. If you had more time, you’d be able to put it off longer. What do you put off to the last moment? Why? Tell a story about how you just barely got something done in time – or didn’t.
Alternate: Splat! Use that word in a story or a poem.

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Pizza

Submitted by kdriscol on May 2, 2008 - 21:05.

Pizza

By Morgan Smith
Northfield Elementary School, Grade 4

Pepperoni or cheese--any kind you want
If I could, I'd have pizza every night
Zoom, so good, gone in a snap
Zap, more, more, more
Always will be my favorite food

Good Pizza

Submitted by JAC on May 4, 2008 - 18:51.

Hi Morgan,

This is a fun poem! I like your alliteration (both zoom/zap and good/gone). And starting a line with "Zap" after ending the one before it with "snap" is a great way to connect the two lines.

I like pizza myself, so I can relate to this poem easily. It might be even better if you added more details about the pizza--about how it tastes and smells, for example. That way your reader can imagine it the way you do.

You've written a great poem--keep up the good work!

~Jessica

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