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Rambling

He took planes and
trains to get to
where he wanted to
go, but everyone had been
there before so
it didn't matter,
especially when your feet are
dirty and it takes more
than soap and water to
wash away the
scars he said came from
ovens or
sports; all his
fault, never his
father's. That happens to
everyone, anyway,
we're all so
perfect and we cry fake
tears just to get good
grades and empathy. His hair
was like straw because he spent
one too many nights
lying in hay bails in farms that
didn't belong to him
or anyone he knew but
we're all connected in
some way and we're all a
little bit
of everybody so he
thought it was okay. He
read books where the
orphaned children got
hung for stealing bread, right
in the middle of the
town square and it was
like a play because back then
nobody had anything better to do
without cable TV
or internet. Back when
newspapers were the only
way to spread news and people
would read the headlines with a
pained look on their face and
think there
was nothing they
could do to help, so they'd
ride their bikes to work
and cook dinner for their
flawless families while the
orphans went on
stealing bread. He wrote an
essay for school, but
the teacher said
it was weird and
he was weird and
suggested he see someone
who could help him and
make sure he became
one of those people that only
read the newspapers.

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This is fascinating. I'd

Submitted by mixedmusic333 on May 17, 2008 - 22:09.

This is fascinating. I'd almost suggest trying to pinpoint one main theme, but it's really pretty obscurely clear just the way it is. I do like this character, however, and it might be a fun idea to expand it more in this poem or others about him.

Very cool job.

Thanks, I've been trying out

Submitted by Katy on May 17, 2008 - 22:18.

Thanks, I've been trying out this style, the whole confusing, multiple ideas weaved into one poem.
And I'm weirdly drawn to a character like this, too.

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