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Love Story

Mango's picture

Here's the script,
I'll be the girl,
You be the boy,
Caught in my swirl
Of poise and beauty,
Flashing your smile
Like it's been a while
Since you saw me...

Our love is a story,
Front to back,
Just a book in the stack,
And it's all going black.

When will we realize
We don't fit,
Maybe a page or two
After the bit
Where I slam the door,

Oh,what did you do that for?

*chorus*
Here's the script,
I'll be the girl,
You be the boy,
Caught in my swirl
Of poise and beauty,
Flashing your smile
Like it's been a while,
Since you saw me...

Here's a thought,
Why don't we skip to the end,
And try to pretend,
Nothing ever happened.

That way maybe,
We will be,
As close as the sea and the sand,
Part of a circle,
Part of a story,
Part of a love story...

*chorus*
Here's the script,
I'll be the girl,
You be the boy,
Caught in my swirl
Of poise and beauty,
Flashing your smile
Like it's been a while,
Since you saw me....

this is great! its so true,

this is great!
its so true, but still flows in a way that songs should

Mango's picture

thanx so much! *smilz*

thanx so much! *smilz*

loverofbeauty's picture

definitely a very pulled

definitely a very pulled together set of lyrics, not once did it seem u were rymthing just to rymth, ( which is a good thing)
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Love is giving someone the power to break your heart, but trusting them not to

ParisianTwist's picture

As Sally said, this is a

As Sally said, this is a very well written, very pulled together song. It reminds me very much of the song "overboard by Ingrid Michaelson, especially as she writes "I'll play the girl if you play the guy..."
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"Imperfection is beauty. Madness is Genius. And it’s better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring." -Marylin Monroe

Mango's picture

hrmmm...I hope it doesn't

hrmmm...I hope it doesn't sound like i'm copying her. :( because i've never heard that song before...

ParisianTwist's picture

No, its still completely

No, its still completely original. I'd love to hear the tine this goes to sometime
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"Imperfection is beauty. Madness is Genius. And it’s better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring." -Marylin Monroe

squeejay's picture

hey

this is really good, Mango.
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A thousand tears rolling down your cheek are healed by a single tear on the shoulder of a friend.

Mango...

I like this. And feel free to reject what I'm about to suggest...

Do you have the music in your mind? Are you a singer? Or do you play an instrument? What if you recorded this as a podcast (see link to instructions above; no equipment needed) and posted a new version as a podcast, with the text copied into the body....

Would love to hear it.

gg

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