Due this week

General Writing. Send in your best work – poems, short stories, essays. (Feel free to do it throughout the year, but this gives you a deadline.)
Deadline: Oct. 10.

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  • Click "create content" and create an ENTRY
  • Fill out "title," "author name, school & grade" and "prompt" boxes.
  • Paste story into "body."
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Shiver Shatter

Anonymous's picture

My sheets smells like you
And I’m breathing it in
Getting high off the thought of you.

You kiss like you want to climb inside
And in turn, I want to unzip you
And make your breath
catch.

Your breath on my neck
Makes me shiver shatter
Until I’m crashing into pieces
And you’re licking every one.

You weren’t part of the plan
Part of my plan for this summer

I'm giving up on plans.

mixedmusic333's picture

Wow. The fact that this is

Submitted by mixedmusic333 on June 5, 2008 - 15:48.

Wow. The fact that this is so condensed elevates the intensity... One small thing: in the first stanza, "you" is written twice, and it makes it slightly awkward.

Poet_Jessica's picture

wow, very intense, like MM

Submitted by Poet_Jessica on June 5, 2008 - 19:46.

wow, very intense, like MM said. my fave part:
You kiss me like you want to climb inside
And in turn, I want to unzip you
And make your breath
Catch.
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Edward: "and so the lion fell in love with the lamb.."
Bella: "what a stupid lamb"
Edward: "what a sick, masochistic lion.."
Quoted from Twilight by Stephenie Meyer

misilover's picture

I really like this,

Submitted by misilover on June 6, 2008 - 14:40.

I really like this, escpecially the second stanza.

I do think, however, the last line weakens the punch at the end.

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