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5. Haunted. Have you ever been in a house where things go bump in the night? Do you believe that some buildings or places are haunted? Is there one in your town? Tell us a story about it. Make it believable.
Alternate: Lockers. What one thing do you wish no one to know about in your locker? Or what is the most important thing in your locker? Deadline: Friday Oct. 17.

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Smile Again (please)

emnoodlehead's picture

I was walking down a crowded downtown street
With a classic blue sky above my head when I recognized
Your skeleton figure ahead of me.
I squeezed the two hands I was holding-
The hands of two dear friends who I had (thankfully) met
After we broke up for the last time over a year ago.
.
"That's her" I said softly so that only
The two beside me could hear.
"Oh" one of my friends said.
"Yeah, can we go somewhere else?" I uttered
"Okay" answered the other.

I had only seen you a few times since that frighteningly angry day when
We said goodbye for the final time.
You looked better than I remembered.
Your hair was a different color but I saw you smile-
At some other girl’s pretty face.
The girl didn’t matter.
I hadn’t seen you smile in so long.
Do you remember that day when you asked me to fly with you?
I asked where and you answered with some
Lovable complement about my hair that we had just dyed red.
You used to smile, remember?
I do.

My friends and I left
But my eyes stayed on you-
I was afraid that turning away would mean
Never seeing you smile again.

misilover's picture

Lovely, Em. I like the

Submitted by misilover on June 21, 2008 - 22:10.

Lovely, Em.

I like the dialogue in the second stanza.

sinisterVT's picture

Oh my. she doesn't smile

Submitted by sinisterVT on June 22, 2008 - 21:23.

Oh my.
she doesn't smile much does she.
just wow Em, its very good

sinisterVT's picture

Oh my. she doesn't smile

Submitted by sinisterVT on June 22, 2008 - 21:24.

Oh my.
she doesn't smile much does she.
just wow Em, its very good

sinisterVT's picture

Oh my. she doesn't smile

Submitted by sinisterVT on June 22, 2008 - 21:24.

Oh my.
she doesn't smile much does she.
just wow Em, its very good

sk8ergrl's picture

I really like...

Submitted by sk8ergrl on July 10, 2008 - 17:55.

I really like the dialogue in the poem. It's very smooth. It kind of reminds me of a excerpt from a story. I like it.

NonSequitur's picture

I like this a lot,

Submitted by NonSequitur on July 10, 2008 - 19:43.

I like this a lot, especially the last stanza.

One suggestion: In the second stanza, I don't think it's necessary to say so every time a person speaks. I think the dialogue sort of stands on its own.
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"It's either broken or it's French."

Beautiful

Submitted by KHurley on October 1, 2008 - 17:05.

I liked how you kept the converstaion short and simple and from the heart.

I think that since you put your feelings out there it made the dialogue and the meaning that much stronger.

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