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ParisianTwist's picture
Submitted by ParisianTwist on July 5, 2008 - 21:09.

There's just one more, chance you can take,
before we come back to this:
I'm just not sure how long I can break,
myself away from your kiss.
It's just too hard,
It's just too long,
I'm sorry, I won't be alone.
It's just too hard
I'm just too strong
and Baby, this place, it's not your home.

Cause you ran away, to el-dorado
Sleepin' in the back of a car,
I guess right now, I just wanna let you know,
I never thought we'd make it that far,
but now you're there, in California,
drippin' with the booze in your shoes,
Now you're there in California,
You've got nothing left to lose.

You take those pills, everyday now,
I guess that's what you're all about,
you're selling your soul, your clothes your everything,
You're selling yourself out
Its just too hard,
It's been too long,
I'm sorry, I just cannot stay.
It's just to hard,
I'm not that strong,
I can't watch you, fading away.

I take a plum, you take a peach,
You lay out naked, on the beach
I take a peach, you take a plum,
we're just too different
(and too young.)

Cause you ran away, to el-dorado
Sleepin' in the back of a car,
I guess right now, I just wanna let you know,
I never thought we'd make it that far,
but now you're there, in California,
drippin' with the booze in your shoes,
Now you're there in California,
I couldn't ever ever make you choose.

sinisterVT's picture

Just wow. as I am listing

Submitted by sinisterVT on July 5, 2008 - 22:21.

Just wow.

as I am listing to this I have my bass in my hand and now i'm tryign to figure out a bass line for it.

although I kind of fell like that may be intruding on your poetry/song to try to make music along side it.

it's amazing

ParisianTwist's picture

Thank you... but

Submitted by ParisianTwist on July 5, 2008 - 22:34.

Thank you...
but no...
there's no such thing as intrusion.
I'm glad it invites more.

sinisterVT's picture

I have it. the bass line can

Submitted by sinisterVT on July 5, 2008 - 22:35.

I have it. the bass line can you read tab?

sinisterVT's picture

G|-----------11--------------

Submitted by sinisterVT on July 5, 2008 - 22:48.

G|-----------11--------------12-----------11----------12-------------11--------------12----|
D|----9--------------9-------------9------------9------------9--------------9-------------|
A|---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------|
E|---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------|
that just keeps on going and then this variation goes in were ever you want it too
G|-----------------------------------------------------------------------------|
D|----9------12--------9---11----------9------12------9------11------9------12--------9
A|------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
E|-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------
this repeats twice with this at the end

G|--------------------------------------------9---------------------------------
D|----9------12--------9---11----------9------------9------------9------12------
A|----------------------------------------------------------12------------------
E|------------------------------------------------------------------------------

so yeah thats what it looks like on bass the first part is the base of the song and then the rest is like a variation fill kinda thing

so yeah try it out if you want I'd gladly play it but I have nothing to record with

writingdog's picture

wow

Submitted by writingdog on July 7, 2008 - 10:54.

your voice is amazing!!! Cool podcast.
You should like join a band and sing lead vocals.
Good job.

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