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Pegged

ParisianTwist's picture

*written in the perspective of Hansel and Gretel's stepmother for a class.*

Two square pegs can never find a place in a heart.

Dishes need washing
Clothes need mending,
Supper need cooking

I'm so tired.

Two square pegs can never find a place in a home.

Children keep crying
(so loud)
(so long)
(so sadly)

You're not here.

Two square pegs don't fit along with the round ones.

No games in the yard
No laughing in the garden
No baking in the kitchen.

They're already gone anyway.

Two square pegs don't belong in this place.
Nothing quite fits,
and
(woodcutter, dear)
You're the only one who can pull them out
just before they
splinter.

greenie's picture

I really like the repetition

Submitted by greenie on July 9, 2008 - 08:29.

I really like the repetition and the rephrasing. It's interesting to have the different perspective.

"Two square pegs don't belong in this place.
Nothing quite fits,
and
(woodcutter, dear)
You're the only one who can pull them out
just before they
splinter."

NonSequitur's picture

Oh...

Submitted by NonSequitur on July 11, 2008 - 15:03.

I love this. So much. This is officially my favorite piece of yours!
This has to be published one day. It's beautiful, and I love the concept behind it.
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