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Winter Ball

"Ready to go?" My sister, Emily, asked me as we headed over to our friend's house to get ready.
"Yep," I replied grabbing my makeup bag. My black dress, with blue accents, was draped over my arm, and my black heels were held loosely in my hand.
We pulled out of out stone driveway, and drove toward Anna's house to get ready. We pulled into her neighborhood, and drove past white, and beige, and yellow houses. We pulled into her driveway and gathered our things in our hands. As we made our way to the front door, I couldn’t help getting excited- this was my first big dance in high school!
“Hi guys!” Anna greeted, with Stephanie, Hannah, Megan and Holly behind her. “So glad you could make it!” She led us past the stairs to the kitchen, where Stephanie and Hannah’s mothers were talking with Anna’s mom.
“Who wants what done with their hair?” Hannah’s mom asked the six of us.
I explained that I wanted it to be up, but wasn’t sure how.
“Okay, sit down, and I’ll see what I can do.” She worked diligently with my wavy brown hair, making it into a french braid, with a looped tail at the bottom.
After my hair was done, I went upstairs to the bathroom, and put my makeup on. I brushed some pink blush onto my cheeks, and some shimmer-blue eye shadow on my lids.
When I was done, I changed into my black halter dress. The bottom, which had a satin blue ribbon around it, fell to about my knees. The same color ribbon was also tied around my waist. I quickly tied the neck strings, and slipped into my shoes.
I walked downstairs, being careful that I didn't trip. When I walked into the kitchen, Emily's hair had been straightened, Hannah's curled, and Stephanie's up in a formal-do. Megan's hair was curled, and sat around her shoulders.
When we were all ready, we walked down the street to Aaron's house. When we walked in, the guys weren't there yet, so we all went upstairs to the office and hung out while we waited.
Aaron's mom came up to tell us that they were all waiting for us downstairs in the living room. We lined up, and slowly made our way down the carpeted stairs. Megan went first, going over to her boyfriend of almost two years, and giving him a kiss. Anna found Evan, while Stephanie came down the stairs and stood next to Aaron. Holly came into the living room and wrapped her arm around David. Meanwhile, Emily, Hannah, and I- since we didn't have dates- came in and stood next to all the couples.
After pictures, we went into the dining room, which Aaron's parents had turned into a "restaurant." They served us meat, roasted potatoes, and green beans with garlic bread.
When we had all finished, we piled into three cars, and drove to the Sheraton.
We were all having fun dancing, and laughing together. And then, the last slow song came on, and Aaron suggested that Hannah, Emily, and I go and find someone to dance with.
I whispered to my sister, "But the guy I want to dance with isn't here!"

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This is a great set-up. I

This is a great set-up. I can see the story going most anywhere. A couple of comments. First, is to try to "show" things more than "tell" them. E.g. in one place you say "with Stephanie, Hannah, Megan and Holly behind her". Showing that would be something more like "Stephanie peeked over her shoulder, and, looking past her I could see Hannah chatting amiably with Megan and Holly around a big bowl of popcorn." Also, in about the third paragraph, the driving one, you use the word pulled three times. Try to think of synonyms or other vivid verbs that would describe this action and what is taking place while driving. Great start!

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