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With Wings

rebel_angel's picture
Submitted by rebel_angel on August 3, 2008 - 09:25.

Its continuously buffering..so if anyone knows how to fix that please tell me!

She's got angel wings spiraling
out from her shoulder blades,
inked on by a woman who's eyes
are etched with Kohl and fingers
dangling with $10 "diamonds".

My wings, she told me,
my wings let me fly,
I didn't believe her.
With peppermint lips she
smacked out the words,
"Angels have wings and so do I!".
I could see that.

She stood there, eyes, sad.
She wanted to believe what she
had just said.
But the woman with the $10 "diamonds"
and eyes etched with Kohl told her
"Honey, fairy tales are over."

rebel_angel's picture

buffering...

Submitted by rebel_angel on August 3, 2008 - 09:28.

I'm coming across that buffering problem..any ideas on how to fix it?

miss_literal's picture

Love the poem, but it wont

Submitted by miss_literal on August 3, 2008 - 15:28.

Love the poem, but it wont let me listen to it. I dont know why...

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~miss lit~

NonSequitur's picture

These lyrics are gorgeous.

Submitted by NonSequitur on August 5, 2008 - 21:07.

These lyrics are gorgeous. Just...perfect. I can't think of one word to change. The juxtaposition and the word choice are amazing, the first stanza in particular.

One tiny error: "Whose" instead of "who's".

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"It's either broken or it's French."

mixedmusic333's picture

GG! We have another

Submitted by mixedmusic333 on August 14, 2008 - 12:36.

GG! We have another buffering problem!

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