I Still Love You (Part One)
I slammed the door of the car in my ex boyfriends face.
"Amelia, please, don’t do this!" he shouted trying to open the locked door. he was pleading now but he lost me, he hurt me to much for me to stay.
"Jake, I need to go." with that the car roared to life. I slammed on the gas and left him, standing in the middle of the muddy driveway watching me leave.
The tears slipped down my cheeks slowly, I could feel my heart sinking each mile I drove, and each second that passed I wished I could go back.
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Five years passed and each day I asked my self why did I leave Jake, the guy I was in love with and still did? And each day I told my self that he was never there for me and this is what I had to do. I had to get out of the relation ship I cried in, but if that was the reason why did I cry more now, after i left him, left my hometown and "moved on" with my life?
I was 26 now, still single with a one-bed room apartment, and a cat living in New York City. I worked in a coffee shop and barely made my rent,
and sadly, I still lived in the past. I still lived that one night back in the winter of 2003 when I left the only man I would have married
Jasmine: This is a very
Jasmine:
This is a very interesting way to talk about love. I like what you are exploring here. One thing that I would suggest is to go back and check your spelling. Mistakes like 'slamed' instead of 'slammed' can be distracting to the reader and interrupt the flow of the story. I hope you keep writing because you have a lot of potential!
Suzanne W.
Castleton State College Student
Suzanne....
Thank you for the feed back, I do just want to tell you that I wrote what came to my mind, so I'm trying to polish it...Also if you do like the story then there will be more parts comeing soon.(I think three, but I dont really know yet.)
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