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14. Procrastination. If you had more time, you’d be able to put it off longer. What do you put off to the last moment? Why? Tell a story about how you just barely got something done in time – or didn’t.
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Letting go

The sound of the humidifier fills the room,
pressing outwards, bending to fit into every corner,
and I cry.
Tears of joy, tears of sadness pour out of me,
my cheeks hot and my pillow stained with salty teardrops.
That uncomfortablee pressure was building up
in my throat, behind my eyes, and I cry
now. Alone, able to let go.
Eventually, it slows and stops. My hair is
messy, and I breathe slowly in and out.
Life in my lungs and heart.

Letting Go

Submitted by KHurley on November 21, 2008 - 13:20.

The passion in this passage is outstanding. I think by making the feelings of the narrator so strong was a great way to get the reader to comprehend the passion and meaning better.

I also like how it slowly unravels from the beginning description of the room , and then to the person who going through a tough time. Overall, I feel that the layout is good, the word choice is good, and the passion is so strong that the piece becomes that much more vivid for the reader. You too an ordinary situation that happens to many and made it shine!

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