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14. Procrastination. If you had more time, you’d be able to put it off longer. What do you put off to the last moment? Why? Tell a story about how you just barely got something done in time – or didn’t.
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And You Always Say I'm the Cruel One

ecrivaine's picture

i.
Your words
hit me
like a bullet
cold
hard
delivered through the heart

ii.
It was quick
some would call it painless
a "clean break"

iii.
I wish you had told me
what I was doing wrong
then maybe
I could fix it

iv.
I'm sorry

Anonymous's picture

I do believe I like this.

Submitted by Anonymous on December 3, 2008 - 21:14.

I do believe I like this. The flow is nice... quick. To the point. Almost painless, as you say.
One suggestion: maybe take out the "and" before hard? It might emphasize the point.

"I believe in this meaningless, beautiful chaos of existence, and I am ready to go with it wherever it leads."

-Bhagwan Shree Rajneesh

ecrivaine's picture

yes... I like that... thank

Submitted by ecrivaine on December 3, 2008 - 21:24.

yes... I like that... thank you!

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