Talk to Me

Submitted by vkovacs on Wed, 09/19/2007 - 12:59pm

Talk to Me

By Veronica Kovacs
Woodstock Union High School, Grade 10

Me:
I want to help because I care.
Understand?
I promise, I’ll always be there.

You:
But who will help you
If my problems
Become too big for two?

Me:
I can handle myself.
And anyway
Right now you need the help.

You:
You have problems of your own.
Does that mean
You’ll cry all alone?

Me:
I’ll depend on you and you me
We’ll cry together
It’ll all workout, see?

You:
But what happens if we both fall?
Who will help us
Hear us when we call?

Me:
We’ll conquer that obstacle when it comes time.
Now tell me
C’mon, what’s on your mind?

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Friendship and Personality

Submitted by njandl on Wed, 09/19/2007 - 7:21pm.

A great poem about the essence of friendship, but also about different personalities. I like the conversational structure you've created, and the rhyming, three-line stanzas. It's a very effective setup. One thing to think about are those "Me" and "You" beginnings to each stanza - I wonder whether they are necessary, because you do a good job of implying two different speakers in the poem. Just something to think about!