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Submitted by CaptainMagma on Thu, 05/28/2009 - 8:21am

Just something I wrote up today..

You've finally made it
This is where your journey begins

You walk away from this town
Leaving all these precious moments we share,
You give me a hug and a final goodbye
I give you a blank stare

My mind is full of laughs and tears
Thinking of the moments we keep,
Now that your leaving us
It is like those moments were thrown in a heep

Of course I'll see you again
Our paths will cross along the way,
This doesn't mean I'm not gonna miss you
This stare just means I have more to say

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Nice.

Submitted by campbelloxsoup16 on Thu, 05/28/2009 - 8:28am.

This is really really good.
Meaningful, and well written.
Is it about losing someone you love?
You evenmade it rhyme! That's hard to do,
Create a piece that rhymes and makes sense, haha :]
Good job.

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i love the way you ended

Submitted by lsp on Thu, 05/28/2009 - 11:22am.

i love the way you ended this. reminds me of what it'll be like going off to college.

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oh thanks

Submitted by CaptainMagma on Tue, 06/09/2009 - 3:00pm.

i got the idea because my brother is going to college

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Epic poem right there. That

Submitted by krustywenis13 on Wed, 06/10/2009 - 8:48pm.

Epic poem right there. That is all that needs to be said is epic poem. It was really meaningful, and i can relate to this same exact situation, because i had to say good-bye to my brother and sister. Well done.

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