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14. Procrastination. If you had more time, you’d be able to put it off longer. What do you put off to the last moment? Why? Tell a story about how you just barely got something done in time – or didn’t.
Alternate: Splat! Use that word in a story or a poem.

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An strange Blackness

Submitted by Mac and Gunner on October 18, 2007 - 10:24.

I am flying but there is something under me. I look down; there is a horse uderneath me.

I have just landing a jump; I blink and dust clouds my eyes.there is a coffing noise then the anouncer says that my class is over and to line up in the center of the arenia.

Than there is a bubbleing sound and my world as I know its goes black. I am unconcois I was in a horse compitishion and my horse had spooked at the anouncers voice and I had fallen off.

I think woke up in the hospital but I was not quite sure because I could not see. I could here my mothers voice, she was trying to soothe me.

Suddenly there was a beeping noise my mom was yelling in my ear. "Its time to wake up! We will be late for your show". I opened my eyes to see if I was really awake. I could see my mothers face. It was so nice to see my mothers bright blue eyes looking down on me!

I am back on the horse now but this time in real life. I keep on telling my self it was just a dream.

This is a really interesting

Submitted by Sarfrancisco on October 18, 2007 - 11:25.

This is a really interesting take on what it's like to be in a state of unconsciousness or dreaming. I think your story could benefit from some editing, however. Check for spelling mistakes, such as coffing (should be coughing) and mechanical errors, such as starting a sentence with a capital letter, or placing a comma before 'but.' I look forward to reading more of your writing in the future!

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