I Can Live With That
I didn't go to school until the sixth grade, when my parents gave me the choice and I decided to try it. For the first month or so of school, before he moved away, a new, unpopular boy shared several classes with me and I saw my first cases of bullying. The pale, slightly pudgy kid tried and failed to be funny and nearly everyone, even girls, said mean things about him and made fun of his attempts to cause laughter. I think he went to the guidance counsellor but, as far as I could tell, nothing happened with it. Shortly before the boy moved away I decided to give him some advice on dealing with the other kid's intolerance. I told him that whenever someone told him something mean to just say "I can live with that." He tried it a couple times and seemed to be enjoying it, but soon afterwards he left suddenly and I never saw him again. I would like to think that I made a positive impact on his life and helped stop him from being bullied at his new school, but I don't think I'll ever know.
Bullies
Bullies are very hard to deal with and I like how your story shows that there are people out there who are trying to help kids that are being bullied. I liked your description of the boy "pale, slightly pudgy", it helps the reader create a picture in their heads.
If this is a true story then you may think about adding a little more detail about what was happening to the boy. Was he moving because the bullying was so bad? Also why did you suggest that he say "I can live with that"? I like that you used this statement because it shows that the person that is saying it is comfortable with themselves and does not care about what others may think about them.
Good job!
A University of Vermont College Mentor