Quintet in g minor by Mozart
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Dangerous,
low,
mysterious,
melting
into innocent melody.
If I close my eyes,
I forget my surroundings,
hear only the song
drawn by bows
with such pure beauty.
The danger returns,
pounding heartbeat beneath
sorrowful refrain--
and then it is past,
forgotten,
lost in the soaring
flight of birds
and calming
whisper of wind.
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Wow, Titania, this is sincerely beautiful.
;) I loved how you managed to tie music, and nature/wind in your writing. Flawless, smooth, and lovely.
Wonderful, darling, simply wonderful.
♦♦♦♦♦♦very nice
Without the title of your peom, to just read it there are so many other mysterious things i can imgine being described. you did a great job capturing feelings and images. I also liked the progression though your writing. very insightful!
Great Versatile Poem
The poem is wonderfully written. The rhyme scheme is complimented well by the diction and syntax throughout the stanzas. The lines where you write “the danger returns, pounding heartbeat beneath” allow the reader to imagine a vast amount of things. It is interesting because the different lines in the poem convey different themes and messages. However, it is up to the reader to decide how they want to infer them. One of the suggestions I have is to use more literary elements such as hyperboles or imagery. For the versatile topic you are writing about I find it appropriate to use hyperbolic phrases in describing the flight of birds or even something more about the pounding heart. This additional use of literary elements will make the poem even more effective than it already is. Overall, I really enjoyed this piece.