One sentence (thirteen through ninteen)
another continuation. I WILL GET TO 100! please... I'd love to read other people's one sentence stories... please?
13: As you looked around the room, at the walls covered in posters and portraits of him, you asked “You really loved him, didn’t you?”
14: sometimes the ultimate sin is the most pure thing possible.
15: As I rifled through the notes I’d kept since freshman year, I realized it was all a lie.
16: Stepping in front of that mirror next to you, naked, was the scariest thing I’ve ever done.
17: Because he was tripping on acid, my father once stole a child’s coffin, then rode around town in his ’68 firebird showing the girls that he really could get away with murder.
18: As he stood on the edge of the cliff, all I could think of was how easy it would be to push him off.
19: I only do art because I’m afraid I’m not good at anything else.
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Numbers thirteen and nineteen have a definite story in there. It'd take a little probing to get the ones in fifteen and sixteen out. Seventeen seems to be trying a little too hard. I really get fourteen, which says even more in its shortness. The funny thing about this medium is that the longer ones tell less than the shorter ones. Have you posted eighteen before? It looks very familiar.
yes... I had a problem with
yes... I had a problem with 17... whats ironic is 17 is actually true...
and 18? I said that once on the bus.
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"Characters are only the pawns of Reality, and reality must begin somewhere." ~Self Quoted
Seventeen is true? You have
Seventeen is true? You have an interesting family.
That's why 18 sounded familiar...were you referring to a particular person then, when you said it?
yes. it is. (More strange
yes. it is. (More strange family to come, including logger and mother stories)
and yes. I fixed 18 in a reply to Imagine... below, I believe.
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"Characters are only the pawns of Reality, and reality must begin somewhere." ~Self Quoted
bestest ever
these are the best so far and very creative!! i agree; 17 is a little weird. short seems to be the best. now, if you ever need a topic for an essay, you will have 100 to choose from.
Comments: First, these are
Comments:
First, these are beautiful, as are your past ones. However, if you're goal is to get to 100, I suggest you write some that aren't tragedies. After awhile, they are going to start sounding redundant.
About these specifically: I suggest you stay away from second person (13)- keeping it in first person makes it stronger and more believable. On 14, there is deffinitely a message, but I don't feel much of a story; maybe relate it to a specific event that still proves your point? I actually really like 17; it's very unique from your other one sentence stories, which makes it stand out. On 18, it sounds a little too close to your bridge suicide one; you could make 18 more different by changing "him" to a specific person, i.e. my brother, etc. 15 and 19 I can totally relate to. 16 evokes an immense amount of emotion, very powerful.
I can't wait for the next installment. You could publish a book of these, they're that good.
thank you! ok. so. lets
thank you! ok. so. lets change it a bit....
(I would change 14, but to change it would make it graphic)
18: As my father stood on the edge of the cliff, all I could think of was how easy it would be to push him off.
as for tragedies. GOD i try so hard to write about powerful happy things, but some of the happiest/most life changing events are tragic. hmmm. what if I do neutral subjects? like... music? art? making stuff!
whatever.
THANKS for the suggestions though... I write these thigs down wherever I can... they just pop up sometimes.
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"Characters are only the pawns of Reality, and reality must begin somewhere." ~Self Quoted
What happens
Often it's the painful or sad emotions that come into words the best for me...Or the negative emotions evoke certain eloquent phrasings. It's less so when I'm happy. Also, it's a heck of a lot easier to feel depressed than to feel glad, sometimes.
actually, I feel REALLY
actually, I feel REALLY happy right now, but then everything ends up being about the same person, about the same experiences.
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"Characters are only the pawns of Reality, and reality must begin somewhere." ~Self Quoted
Why
Why do you feel happy?
Wait--so all your morbid writing is kind of based off the same thing?
I'm happy because I'm over a
I'm happy because I'm over a lot of the subjects I write about. and no. its not all based around teh same thing... its just.. its easier to reflect on morbid things than it is to reflect of happy things.
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"Characters are only the pawns of Reality, and reality must begin somewhere." ~Self Quoted
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i actually agree on that, tragic and sad are almost fun to right and they give mroe emotion and plot
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Life isn't about waiting for the storm to stop, its about learning how to walk in the rain
Morbid writing happens to be
Morbid writing happens to be some of the best writing out there. There's only so much you can write about sunshine and bunnies. No offense Usagi. I really like this idea!
DEAR LORD I do agree. it may
DEAR LORD I do agree. it may be more painful, but it feels more satisfying to get it DOWN.
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"Characters are only the pawns of Reality, and reality must begin somewhere." ~Self Quoted
Exactly! Sometimes you just
Exactly! Sometimes you just need to have a morbid moment. Or five...
or ten. or fifteen. or or
or ten. or fifteen. or or or... A LOT.
or just memories
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"Characters are only the pawns of Reality, and reality must begin somewhere." ~Self Quoted
Yeah
It's often the painful ones that need to be let out.