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14. Procrastination. If you had more time, you’d be able to put it off longer. What do you put off to the last moment? Why? Tell a story about how you just barely got something done in time – or didn’t.
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Waiting

hockeychica1's picture

Waiting.

I sat there at my desk waiting, watching, wanting for him to notice me. We are friends but that’s all. I wish more , but no such luck. Sometimes I wish there was more to say, but in the end I think being friends is for the best, He comes up, says “what’s up?” I said “nothing, how about you?” He said “not much” he says “what's wrong?” I said “nothing I just want to see you happy” He said “ok but what is happening, why are you saying that?” I said “there’s no good reason.” A few days pass; he’s sitting in is room thinking about her. I wondering if she likes me? I’m wonder if she notices that every time I see her in the hall my heart skips a beat. I want her to know that I’m waiting for her and how much I care about her. That same day I was listening to music thinking, waiting for a phone call. I was thinking about him. Does he know I like him? Is he waiting for me to tell him? I won’t tell him because he doesn’t like me. Does he notice I want him to know how much I care? It doesn't matter; we are friends, that’s all I can ask for.
We lived our live's not saying what we thought about each other. Even though we liked each other a lot. 15 years later we’re both married to different people but we still like each other.

Bri!!

i love it!!!! I wish he would like you!!!!!!! your such a good writer its not even funny! oh yeah first comment!!!!lol

p.s happy birthday!!!!!!

luv always

bob boogi kalee

hey

hey happy birthday this is a great story it makes me cry but ill be ok best ever

sydney<33333

Good job! I really like how

Good job! I really like how you switch between the point of view of the girl and the guy and show how they're both feeling and thinking the same things even though neither one knows it. It can be a little confusing, though. How about starting a new paragraph when you switch points of view?
The ending is sad. If you expanded it, maybe showing both their thoughts 15 years later like you did at the beginning, it could be even stronger.
Keep up the good work!

eoleames's picture

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nicee!
i remember reading this in class lol.
its rly good.. keep writing!
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*elena

great job !!!!!!!! have you

great job
!!!!!!!!
have you submitted the Ryan Scheckler one yet
cant wait to read that one
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*Hannah*

good job!

great job!!
yeah i agree with hannah, are you going to submit the ryan scheckler one?
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*jordan

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