No, thats my sister

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Are you the amazing artist?

No, that's my sister.

​ Are you the creative one?

No, that's my sister.

​ Are you the fair skinned beauty?

No, that's my sister.

​ Are you the talented one?

No, that's my sister

    And yet,

        Here you are,

           Yelling why are you so perfect?

I don't ask those painful words to spill out of mouth,

But they do.

No, I whisper, that's my sister.

               

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 I really liked the emotional

 I really liked the emotional part of the poem. It was inspiring.

 

It is deep.

I like your connection to your writing. It is deep.

Thanks :)  

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Thanks :)

 

The way you use repetition in

jacketbundock's picture

The way you use repetition in this is so effective... It's so powerful in such a short amount of time, it's simple, and just so well done in general.

 People say if you look down, you will fall, but if you look up, will you fly?

I like it. I agree with

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I like it. I agree with jacketbundock on the repetition. Sorry it's not very helpfully.

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