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14. Procrastination. If you had more time, you’d be able to put it off longer. What do you put off to the last moment? Why? Tell a story about how you just barely got something done in time – or didn’t.
Alternate: Splat! Use that word in a story or a poem.

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Anxiety You Have Given Me!

cheinz27's picture

Anxiety you've given me!
From the beginning
I was there for you
but then I slowly pulled away,
at the same time our friendship did.
You see you lied to me.
'I know they're taking advantage of me'
but do you?
I look into your heart and soul
and you know what I find?
Lies.
Misunderstanding.
And somewhat betrayal.
This was never about jealousy.
This was about my life changing
and it angers me to no extent
that I can't tell you how I feel.
So here it goes.

Our friendship means the world to you
but this event,
maybe this whole year,
has changed my feelings.
I can never look at you the same way.
Ever again.
And you might think I’m doing for different reasons than the real ones.
I know we will never be as close
and that might be because of me.
But so be it.

emnoodlehead's picture

I like how strong and firm

Submitted by emnoodlehead on February 13, 2008 - 21:06.

I like how strong and firm this poem is, but for good measure you might want to go back and re-read it, and notice the flow when you read it out loud. I really like the conversation-like element to it, especially towards the end. Nice job!

cheinz27's picture

Thanx! I started out writing

Submitted by cheinz27 on February 13, 2008 - 21:09.

Thanx! I started out writing it like it was a poem but I kinda said forget it because I just really needed to write it. I noticed at the end that i lost my some-sense of form, as I call it, but I needed to get the words out. thanx! I love your comments.

cheinz27's picture

Ok I changed the form to be

Submitted by cheinz27 on February 13, 2008 - 21:21.

Ok I changed the form to be a little more poemish. lol.

emnoodlehead's picture

I like it even more now.

Submitted by emnoodlehead on February 13, 2008 - 21:24.

I like it even more now. Great job!!!
:)

cheinz27's picture

thanx for the tip! I only

Submitted by cheinz27 on February 13, 2008 - 21:30.

thanx for the tip! I only changed a few things because I wanted the same straight forwardness but I tried to give it more shape.

emnoodlehead's picture

Good idea, like I said

Submitted by emnoodlehead on February 13, 2008 - 21:33.

Good idea, like I said before the
Straight out feelings in this make it powerful
But now you've added an extra
Component to it.

cheinz27's picture

awesome! once again thanx

Submitted by cheinz27 on February 13, 2008 - 21:35.

awesome! once again thanx for the tip!

emnoodlehead's picture

No prob, keep on writing!

Submitted by emnoodlehead on February 13, 2008 - 21:37.

No prob, keep on writing!

cheinz27's picture

you too!

Submitted by cheinz27 on February 13, 2008 - 21:39.

you too!

emnoodlehead's picture

:D

Submitted by emnoodlehead on February 13, 2008 - 21:40.

:D

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