Hello Darkness

Nicely done here. I think your strongest stanza is the third one. It sounds conversational and the rhymes seem to come naturally--no easy task! I also think the poem has a nice focus. We never forget we're reading about darkness.

What is the name of this form? It looks like terza rima with an extra line in each stanza.

Well done--

Peter

i dont actually know what the name of this form is, i kinda made it up as i went

I like the ideas here, I can guess how they were found...or mayb not. Anyways, I think the fourth line of the third stanza is a little confusing to read. I had to go back to the top of the stanza to see if "was" was the word you wanted to use. It can make sense, but it was a bit awkward. Also, the last line confused me. I love the idea of it, but I want you to explain the dreams, in detail so that I know why they remind you of your fall from grace. And lastly, you use welcome twice in the last two lines, you might want to change that, unless you did it on purpose. Otherwise I love the flow of this poem, and I really got into the theme of it. Well done!

And now gradually darkness falls,
the shadows creeping up the walls,
and join in gangs that slowly grow,
to and fro the black shapes sprawl.

In this darkness eyeballs glow,
from the corners monsters crow,
reminding me theres more to seek,
than just the even ebb and flow.

From this darkness feelings speak,
of emotions i am too mild and meek
to reveal to those that i hold dear,
the lion's roar, the mouse's squeak.

The silence that closely follows fear,
is broken by a single tear,
that whispers alone off into space,
and heard by but a single ear.

Running down my tired face,
I accept the dark's warm embrace,
the dreams that come are welcome friends,
and symbols of my fall from grace.

This is much better now. The whole thing flows really well. nice job.