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14. Procrastination. If you had more time, you’d be able to put it off longer. What do you put off to the last moment? Why? Tell a story about how you just barely got something done in time – or didn’t.
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But I'll Be Alright

cheinz27's picture

Now all I can see
is the left over pain
that's dripping out of me.
And it hurts so bad.
It just hurts so bad.

Love.
Its all that flowed out from me.
Its all I ever wanted to see,
but now its gone.
Its all gone.

This ain't a victory for you.
And this ain't a defeat for me.
Its just one of those things
that takes time to realize.
To realize the pain I'm feeling.

Lost hope and despair.
I really wish I could care,
but I don't.
But at the same time I do.
Oh yes I do.

Can it be
that I put my vulnerability
into your hands
and now its all gone.
All just gone.

I wish that I
could build a machine to go back in time
and never say hi to you.
But we're already machines
but just can't go back.

Why must this happen to me?
Trusting you with my insecurity,
which was all I ever had
and what I never will need,
oh never again.

I tell you now
that its hard to think of you
and me, just us loving two.
But it ain't so bad,
at least the future says so.

Now all I can see
ss the left over pain
that's dripping out of me.
And it hurts so bad.
It just hurts so bad.

But I'll be alright.
Just give it time.

emnoodlehead's picture

Wow, I really like the

Wow, I really like the direction this poem takes.
A couple things:
You might want to just go back and spell check a wee bit, nothing major.
Also, you might want to say “All just gone” instead of "Just all gone." to keep the flow steady.
I really like this though, nice job!

cheinz27's picture

thanks! i appreciate the

thanks! i appreciate the advice!

cheinz27's picture

ok i ran it through a spell

ok i ran it through a spell checker and changed that phrase. hopefully that makes it alot stronger. thanx again! keep writing!

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